Linking sentences, "rural", "nature"

Grammar -- Spring 2010 - J. E. Seibert -- TIUA
Some suggestion from your writing assignment.

I. We link sentences with transitions. We usually don't begin sentences in formal writing with "and", "but", "then", and "because". (Review page 64 in your text.)

No

Yes

*~~My hometown has several concert halls and arenas. And there are several good schools.~~ ~~Then many parks provide children and adults with places to relax and exercise.~~ My hometown has several concert halls and arenas.In addition, there are several good schools. Moreover, many parks provide children and adults with places to relax and exercise. Lastly, there is little pollution and crime.

*~~I love my hometown. But there are few places to have fun. Because it is so small.~~ I love my hometown, but there are few places to have fun because it is so small.

II. Countryside, country, rural

Countryside: A noun used to describe the beauty of of areas outside towns and cities.
- The countryside west of Salem is gorgeous.
Country: A noun describing the area outside towns and cities.
- I live in the country.
Rural: an adjective describing the area or something happening outside of towns and cities
- My family lives in a rural area. (= My family lives in the country.)

III. Nature: be specific or use other words.

No	Yes
*~~My hometown has a lot of nature.~~	My hometown has many parks and forests. My hometown has a lot of greenspace. My hometown is surrounded by natural areas. My hometown has a lot of landscaped areas.
*~~The nature in Salem in nice.~~	The parks and trees in Salem are nice. The greenspaces in Salem are nice. The landscaping in Salem in nice.

No	Yes
*~~My hometown has several concert halls and arenas. And there are several good schools.~~ ~~Then many parks provide children and adults with places to relax and exercise.~~	My hometown has several concert halls and arenas.In addition, there are several good schools. Moreover, many parks provide children and adults with places to relax and exercise. Lastly, there is little pollution and crime.
*~~I love my hometown. But there are few places to have fun. Because it is so small.~~	I love my hometown, but there are few places to have fun because it is so small.